Comments on Testing

Re: Testing (LJ)

That was great! Really made me smile, and the thought of Miles at Hogwarts is a fairly terrifying concept. I'm not entirely convinced he would be in Slytherin, as I think he has as much, if not more, of a 'saving people thing' than Harry, but I can see how you got him there.

The only suggestion I would make would be to remove the last scene altogether - the one with just Miles and Ivan. I thought you'd written it clearly enough without the exposition. Maybe just a line in the whispered conversation between Miles and Draco in the second to last scene. But it would be even better if you could come up with a suitably Milesian favour to put Draco through.

Titles? I think 'Testing' works quite well, but if you really want to change it how about "The Magician's Apprentice" or "Coming up short"?

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Comment by daiseechain
Re: Testing (LJ)

Oh. My. Ghods.

Miles Vorkosigan at Hogwarts? And in Slytherin?

By the time he'd left school, Snape would have made that nice Mr. Ogden (of firewhiskey fame) a lot richer. And his hair would probably be as white as Dumbledore's beard.

I can just imagine the parent-teacher conferences...after his first meeting with Cordelia, Snape says: "No need to open the door, Countess, I'll just slide out under it!"

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Comment by ravenclaw_eric
Re: Testing (LJ)

Love it! My thoughts in particular...

1 - You win extra bonus points for it being a Transfiguration class. According to word of God, skill with Transfiguration reflects the capacity for needed personal change.

2 - Those cultural equivalents are made of win. Being from Cali meself, though, I suggest that you specify San Francisco or Berkeley. Lodi, Napa and most of the rest of Nor-Cal are archconservative.

3 - Miles is such a Slytherin. At least, Miles is such a Slytherin according to the original definition of the term. (Shakes fist at JKR for everything after book 5)

4 - That ending is perfect. Perfect Miles, and perfect High Fantasy - style "Evil cannot fathom good, and this is why they fail."

5 - I want to see more of wizard!Vorkosiverse (sic).

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Comment by l_the_fangirl
Testing 1. Chapter 1

Sneeeaky! Excessivelyperky recommended this to me; I think I'd seen it before, but I don't know if it was here.

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Comment by Technomad
Testing 1. Chapter 1

I love this story. The Vorkosigans et al in the wizading world. You haven't considered expanding the universe.

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Comment by joniskpelare
Testing 1. Chapter 1

Oh. My. God. This is so fricking hilarious! I have to admit, I bridled a bit at first, thinking that Miles oughtn't to have been sorted into Slytherin (he IS the kid who insisted on playing the loyal retainer to the child-emperor and would move several worlds one teaspoon at a time to avoid the Imperium, after all), but looking back at our favorite sneaky dwarf... totally appropriate. And his little trick is COMPLETELY in character for him! smirk Miles, you crafty little hunchback...

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Comment by GoldenRoya
Testing 1. Chapter 1

Yes Miles as a TRUE Slytherin! And yes if he were in the HP universe that is where he would be, with true ambition and cunning.

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Comment by Kling
Testing 1. Chapter 1

A Slytherin that would have Salazar himself nervous. Great fun, that deserves to be developed.

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Comment by erik
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