Comments on Completing The Circuit

Completing the Circuit

Oh, I like that a lot. Well-spotted on the pronouns, too. I hadn't really noticed that Avon uses "he" at that point, but if so, then this really does slot beautifully into canon. And, hey, I think "internal dialog" is an acceptable use of what you were given. :) Excellent job.

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Comment by astrogirl2
Completing the Circuit

Or at least, the manual wasn't very cooperative.

Hee!

Neither was there warm fuzzy love.

Well, that's good. ;-)

Though it makes me wonder if Zen gives each person it communes with the type of support s/he most needs.

It's very tidy, the way you tied various ideas and events from different points in the series together here. And I did immediately recognize that it was set post-Volcano. Good work.

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Comment by mistraltoes
Completing the Circuit

Applause! That's excellent and so believable for both of them.

I have only one quibble, and it's a small one. Do Australians say 'gotten' like Americans?

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Comment by vilakins
Completing the Circuit 1. Chapter 1

Awesomelicious! (I know, not a word) That was a great story! I have from time to time wondered about that particular part of the Liberator, but beyond all of that I loved how you described the experience with Zen and Avon. It read so wonderfully that when it ended that single sentence made sense for Avon. I have to confess not spotting that use of 'he' afterwards in the episodes. This makes a great bridge to such usage. Thank you for writing this!

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